Thanks Steve. Years ago when I wrote this a writer friend of mine reminded me that it lacked an antagonist. He was right of course. Then I assured him that it was only meant to be an exercise of "creative writing". Hence the photo at the bottom which alludes to the impending fall and stimulating the readers imagination. He also suggested I write the preceding in first person from Adam's perspective, another excellent piece of advice. However, since then I've moved on to other things. Rest assured he was pleased with a few of my later writings which are replete with antagonists/ protagonists, lol. His critique was most welcomed, iron sharpening iron after all.
Well written, Jim. I totally enjoyed it.
Thanks Steve. Years ago when I wrote this a writer friend of mine reminded me that it lacked an antagonist. He was right of course. Then I assured him that it was only meant to be an exercise of "creative writing". Hence the photo at the bottom which alludes to the impending fall and stimulating the readers imagination. He also suggested I write the preceding in first person from Adam's perspective, another excellent piece of advice. However, since then I've moved on to other things. Rest assured he was pleased with a few of my later writings which are replete with antagonists/ protagonists, lol. His critique was most welcomed, iron sharpening iron after all.